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I'm like a pebble being skipped across the water, a small child having a brush with the unreal. My sanity is as transparent as these words that no longer make sense and I fear I'm going to lose my balance and fall off this tightrope soon. My only hope is the jaws of a lion aren't waiting below because I've yet to tame death and I can feel it consuming my shadow and prickling my skin with goose bumps.

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They used to tell me I should join a circus one day but I preferred to eat animal crackers and sip on apple juice instead. There are a thousand, no a thousand and three miles separating my lungs and their deprecation of oxygen as they've filed a formal protest, suing me for negligence because of the one time I thought it would be cool to inhale cigarette smoke. I choked it right back up and my throat was sore for weeks, like the time I went scuba diving.

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I was stung by a jellyfish and let out a girlish scream only to have ocean water jet down my throat. The salt clung to my esophagus and threatened to turn my insides into ash and that's the closest I've ever been to Chinese water torture.

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I'm like a forecast of partly cloudy with a 40% chance of rain, except the rain is in the form of words strung together in an attempt to be humorous, yet the only funny thing about me is the way I pronounce roof.

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I'm afraid of heights and I'm too clumsy to climb a ladder so don't expect to snap a photo of me tracing the constellations as I lay flat on my back on the roof. Plus, I'm not very photogenic and I would rather take a pencil to s sketchpad than be stuck behind a camera lens, trapped within a 3 second time frame and a blinding flash.

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I'm much more than this hollow shell I come off as and I'm much more than the letters I put together to try and impress, but if you study me long enough, you'll find I'll always be much less than you were led to believe.
very different and weird compared to what i normally write. it felt like a translucent dream as i was writing it. i'm trying to branch out and write whatever comes to mind, instead of giving too much thought to it.

comments please. feedback gives me reason to continue pushing to become a better writer.

these words are my heart. my iridescent heart.
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Forever-My-Cookie Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011
God, this was simply beautiful.
"but if you study me long enough, you'll find I'll always be much less than you were led to believe."
The piece not only starts off powerful but ends so as well. I like the overall use of metaphors and their appeal to the both the work and audience.
Splendid job, as always.
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draecana Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I love, love, love this style of writing! And I love that you're trying it out! You're so very good at it. I enjoyed reading this, immensely.
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snowraven0 Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2011  Student General Artist
I read this last night but I couldnt comment or fave because my internet went out -_-; .
But agree with the other people who commented, this style though it is a wee bit different from your usual stuff, fits you very well. Had me intrigued the entire time I was reading~
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RadishStick Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011  Student General Artist
I really love this style, and I think you do it well. I don't really know how to describe the style itself, but it makes me keep reading because I have no idea what's coming next but still there's a sense of mad importance to what's being written! Nice work :)
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
very apt and piercing portrait of a self. many different images inhabiting many different levels.

you write a lot like a younger me, honestly. reading this was kinda deja-vu.
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NOTHINandEVERYTHING Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much!

as for the writing like a younger you, idk what to think of that lol seeing as how i am several years older than you. :P
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i-am-a-bridgewalker Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
haha, well, age has really nothing to do with style. we all move through thematic material in a different order.
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