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They say there's a seventy percent chance of rain
in the forecast for today but I refuse to believe
that we will be flooded and washed away
much like the dreams I had once upon a time.
I'm cold and the thermostat is broken
but nothing ever seems to work these days

anyways. Night's now staved off, bringing longer days
so I take advantage of it, letting the sun rain
down on me and serve as relief for my broken
heart. It's amazing what happens when you believe
in what you can't see. I used to pray all the time
but then I lost faith and watched it slip away

like the time I went numb as you pushed me away
as if I was cancer. It was the darkest of days
for me and there's never an hour or time
where thoughts of the past cease to rain
down on my fragile mind. The doctors believe
they can stitch me up but I'm sure I'll stay broken

and never be whole again. I'm the kind of broken
that you never see fixed. There must be a way
but I'm starting to lose hope and believe
my state is as permanent as the 365 days
that add up to a year. So far, my reign
has lasted 21 years but I fear my time

is running out and it's about that time
to move on and live for me. You broke in
to my inhibitions and let your words rain
down on my lips, hoping it would keep away
a tragic ending but now that those days
are long gone, we're left to believe

nothing lasts forever. You don't have to believe
these words I etch onto paper, but as time
goes on so will my lasting state of daze
and all the lies and promises that were broken.
I seem to have gone off track and lost my way
and I'm unsure how to put a stop to the rain

or believe I won't always be broken,
or that maybe time will fade away,
leaving these days as memories soaked in rain.
another assignment for english class. the form is called a sestina. consists of 6 sestets (6 line stanza) and an envoi (3 line stanza) you use the original first 6 end words throughout, just mixing up the order as the form calls for. i used a couple tricks by using homophones at a couple places. i used loads of enjambment because i like a freeness to the piece.

comments and critiques always appreciated.

these words are my heart. i'm lost without them.
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writes-onherheart Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012
You're writing is so beautiful. I read it and want to write so badly, but my brain is filled with blocks. i love how in the description you always put "these words are my heart, i'm lost without them".
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NOTHINandEVERYTHING Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
awww well thanks! yeah i haven't had the time or energy or inspiration to write in i dont even know how long. over a month at least. i miss it but we will both get back to it! and thanks! these words are my heart is my own personal tag line i created through the help of a friend. i wanna get a tattoo of it very soon!
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writes-onherheart Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
Its always a pleasure. ehh,I'm going to try and get back to it eventually. Hopefully...hopefully. I love the idea of getting that as a tattoo. You really should do it! I honestly love it. :)
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AeshaLee Featured By Owner Nov 24, 2011
Its clear that you write from the heart and so passionately. You really have an amazing talent that so many writers can learn from.
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dreamlightning Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I think I've only ever written one sestina... not easy.
I had to use homophones and enjambment as well.

Lovely envoi, btw... did you write it first?
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ohyescesc Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey! would you like to join my new group called love for the lovers? wed love to have your poetry in our galleries. We've got a poetry contest you should check out and you can now request critiques. read the blog post on the page thanks for your time. and I'm sorry that I'm just copying pasting this on love poems but id really like to get more members and people in our group and i dont have time to type every invite out. thanks so much! [link]
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mrots Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2011
Love your use of enjambment - it made the piece just carry on, as though your thoughts were spilling out rather than choreographed word sequences..
Stunning as always kody! ^^;
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mamorel Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
and I'm unsure how to put a stop to the rain <---- my favorite line. it's beautiful, as always.
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Impressive! Someday, I will write a Sestina. I will, I will, I will! Currently, however, it evades me.
So congrats on this one! I liked your tricks with homophones. Very clever.
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ContagiousPixie Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2011  Professional Photographer
I'm so happy about how much you're writing lately. :]
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